Fighter

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Paparazzi (The Biggest Fan of Your Life) on Tuesday, 22-Dec-2009 16:20:50

You think I am weak because in my eyes you see tears.
You think I cant hold myself because I fell into fears.
You think I am weak because I am able to cry
But this is one girl who will not give up and die.
For I am strong you may knock me down but you will never rub the dirt on my face.
For I am smart you can trick me once but a second time you will never face.
For I am beautiful I nasty word or two may damage my pride but will never ruin my confidence
You can try and try and try but you will never win

Post 2 by Sword of Sapphire (Whether you agree with my opinion or not, you're still gonna read it!) on Tuesday, 22-Dec-2009 16:27:15

I had trouble grasping the rhythm of the last four lines, but aside from that, the poem is very meaningful.

Post 3 by Remy (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Wednesday, 23-Dec-2009 15:20:35

I can see that this poem holds meaning, but reading it to myself has lead to the realization that there is a slight issue with your rhythm is a bit off. You could likely easily take out some words in certain lines. This would shorten the lines and make it flow better, but wouldn't take away from the force of the piece.